Wow Helene! This has so much wonderful parts to it! Both the leaves and the flowers are equally amazing! There are some things to consider: judging from the stamen shadow on the open flower on the left, your light source is almost overhead instead of over your shoulder at a 45 degree angle. It seems like you either were working outside or from a photograph. If that is the case, you have to remember to change the lighting to how it should be and not what you are seeing. One aspect of correcting the light source would also require more form toning on the top bud. It is gorgeous, but needs more toning. The thing that really throws me is the battle that exists between the center leaf (amazing job!) and the open flower to it’s left. (also amazing), but they are competing to be the focal point and to me the leaf is winning. The leaf is just as intricate and beautifully realized as the flower and it does not want to play second fiddle! At first glance, it looks like the right edge of the flower meets the left edge of the leaf on a strong diagonal, which is not ideal. Looking closer you see a tiny part of the flower edge is underneath the leaf, but that should be more evident. That is another reason why the leaf is dominate. Personally I would expect a flower (especially as showy and intricate as a hibiscus) to be the focal point and have the complete view of the flower show with the leaf behind it. I don’t imagine you could change this now, but it is something to consider in the future when composing a drawing.
Hi Doug. You are right on all aspects. I would do many things differently especially since the composition workshop. I would love to be joining the webinar today but I am travelling. Have a good one.
Hi Helene- There were strong wind storms here on the East Coast and Pam lost her power, so there was no webinar on Monday. They are trying to reschedule it and there will be a posting when the day is decided on.
Wow Helene! This has so much wonderful parts to it! Both the leaves and the flowers are equally amazing! There are some things to consider: judging from the stamen shadow on the open flower on the left, your light source is almost overhead instead of over your shoulder at a 45 degree angle. It seems like you either were working outside or from a photograph. If that is the case, you have to remember to change the lighting to how it should be and not what you are seeing. One aspect of correcting the light source would also require more form toning on the top bud. It is gorgeous, but needs more toning. The thing that really throws me is the battle that exists between the center leaf (amazing job!) and the open flower to it’s left. (also amazing), but they are competing to be the focal point and to me the leaf is winning. The leaf is just as intricate and beautifully realized as the flower and it does not want to play second fiddle! At first glance, it looks like the right edge of the flower meets the left edge of the leaf on a strong diagonal, which is not ideal. Looking closer you see a tiny part of the flower edge is underneath the leaf, but that should be more evident. That is another reason why the leaf is dominate. Personally I would expect a flower (especially as showy and intricate as a hibiscus) to be the focal point and have the complete view of the flower show with the leaf behind it. I don’t imagine you could change this now, but it is something to consider in the future when composing a drawing.
Hi Doug. You are right on all aspects. I would do many things differently especially since the composition workshop. I would love to be joining the webinar today but I am travelling. Have a good one.
Hi Helene- There were strong wind storms here on the East Coast and Pam lost her power, so there was no webinar on Monday. They are trying to reschedule it and there will be a posting when the day is decided on.