Hi Vanessa- the light area is too much in the middle and should be to the left a little. I also would erase some to get the lightest part of the highlight which would be the color of the paper. The left edge should be 3-4 on the tonal scale as it is closest to your light source. Yours is a bit dark and does not transition lighter as it moves toward the highlight so it appears as an outline, which you do not want. Work on doing smooth even layers of tone that seamlessly transition from tone to tone. It takes some practice and you will get there!
Hi Vanessa- the light area is too much in the middle and should be to the left a little. I also would erase some to get the lightest part of the highlight which would be the color of the paper. The left edge should be 3-4 on the tonal scale as it is closest to your light source. Yours is a bit dark and does not transition lighter as it moves toward the highlight so it appears as an outline, which you do not want. Work on doing smooth even layers of tone that seamlessly transition from tone to tone. It takes some practice and you will get there!