Quite the composition! It does feel jungly. And some nice drawing, but I’m not sure it totally works. The busyness makes it hard to look at. Maybe your intention? I like the use of atmospheric perspective in the background. But don’t like the white halo around the bottom flower. It makes it look like an after thought to fill in the space. I think the composition problem is that the leaves and the flower are fighting for attention. I’d like to see this drawing with the leaves done in graphic or a very desaturated green. Either a lot darker or a lot lighter. So much good stuff going on in the flower, I don’t want it to get lost.
Wow Helene. This is so striking. And I love the style of the composition. So much to look at, and my eye eventually rests at that beautiful large flower at the bottom. I love the little details of the stamen poking out of those top flowers. That faded jungle in the back is great. I would add just a little more of that faded jungle behind that bottom flower to deal with that halo that Katy described. For me, the negative space that is created between those large leaves and the faded background helps to make that lower flower the focal point. I think you could tone down the vibrancy of them a bit so that those leafs don’t compete with that bright red as much. I really love your style, and want to see more. Thanks for sharing this!
I think there is a way to address Katy’s comments with some subtle changes. I think when if you were to tone the background slightly in a pale green gray behind the main flowers and leaves the halo will disappear and we will be able to focus more . I would give it a try. Love all these drawings here
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Quite the composition! It does feel jungly. And some nice drawing, but I’m not sure it totally works. The busyness makes it hard to look at. Maybe your intention? I like the use of atmospheric perspective in the background. But don’t like the white halo around the bottom flower. It makes it look like an after thought to fill in the space. I think the composition problem is that the leaves and the flower are fighting for attention. I’d like to see this drawing with the leaves done in graphic or a very desaturated green. Either a lot darker or a lot lighter. So much good stuff going on in the flower, I don’t want it to get lost.
Wow Helene. This is so striking. And I love the style of the composition. So much to look at, and my eye eventually rests at that beautiful large flower at the bottom. I love the little details of the stamen poking out of those top flowers. That faded jungle in the back is great. I would add just a little more of that faded jungle behind that bottom flower to deal with that halo that Katy described. For me, the negative space that is created between those large leaves and the faded background helps to make that lower flower the focal point. I think you could tone down the vibrancy of them a bit so that those leafs don’t compete with that bright red as much. I really love your style, and want to see more. Thanks for sharing this!
I think there is a way to address Katy’s comments with some subtle changes. I think when if you were to tone the background slightly in a pale green gray behind the main flowers and leaves the halo will disappear and we will be able to focus more . I would give it a try. Love all these drawings here